Shopping is become more and more popular as leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects? Why is shopping so popular? What effects does its popularity have on individuals and on society?

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There are increasing numbers of shopping

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around the world. If you have a chance to go to New York, Tokyo or London..., you will see many mega shopping malls there. One of the reasons why shopping become so popular is we want to show ourselves as rich, have a good life, more beautiful than others.

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trend has an impact on individuals and society. Nowadays,many people have the tendency to buy stuff in online shopping and

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as well.

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companies now are trying to advertise more of their new products in order to attract the customer. They advertised everywhere: in the street, on YouTube or on all social media.

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, online shopping company knows how to advertise what we need through our online history

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as Amazon, they know how to increase selling the product. Everyone wants to prove themselves they are the best and sometimes they buy stuff without any need. Nowadays, we can call the trend of shopping "drug". If we see the young life right now, we will see they consume a lot of things

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with the old generation. Because now we produce a lot of stuff to consume and when they feel lonely or stressed, they will have the tendency to find something to cover up their loneliness or stress. Whenever we buy something, we will feel happy right away because the dopamine will increase after we receive something that we hope

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That makes us consume more than we need.

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, I think we may to balance our shopping. We have to see do we need it or not before we buy it and we have to see our future through saving money.

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Topic Vocabulary:

leisure activity
consumer culture
emotional satisfaction
consumerism
advertising influence
online shopping platforms
sense of pleasure
social interaction
boost the economy
compulsive shopping
materialism
environmental degradation
unsustainable demand
social inequalities
status through possessions

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Shopping is become more and more popular as leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects? Why is shopping so popular? What effects does its popularity have on individuals and on society?

Fully explain your ideas

The digital age has made the gap between the younger and older generations wider. Give reasons for your own answer.

Space travel has been possibile for some time, and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

SOME PEOPLE THINK THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD PAY FOR HEALTH CARE AND EDUCATION, BUT OTHERS BELIEVE IT IS NOT THE GOVERNMENT’S RESPONSIBILITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Some people believe that a person’s criminal record should be removed when they reach the age of 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?