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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs provide information on how many electrical machines (washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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) people possessed from 1920 to 2019, and illustrate the number of
hours
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 spent on
housechores
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house chores
 in the same time periods.
Overall
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, the
percentagewise
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percentages
percentage-wise
 of households using home electronics increased by the end of the
period
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,
while
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less
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fewer
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hours
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 were spent on weekly housework over the periods. In terms of refrigerators, which were hardly used in 1920,
its
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their
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usasge
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usage
 dramatically rose until 1980, at which point it peaked at 100%. Vacuum cleaners
also
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 showed an upward trend, increasing from 30% at the beginning of the
period
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 to 100% by the end of the
period
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.
Although
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 washing machines, which
initially
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 at 40%, had some fluctuations, its rate experienced a gradual increase throughout the
period
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, reaching just over 70%.
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, the
hours
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 spent on housework continued to decline by 40
hours
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 during a 99-year
period
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. It can be seen that people tend to spend less time on family affairs with the increased use of home appliances.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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