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The diagram provides information about production of electricity using a OTEC system.

The diagram provides information about production of electricity using a OTEC system.
The diagram provides information about
production
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the production
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 of electricity using
a
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 OTEC system. The OTEC system is a system that uses
ocean
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the ocean
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 and solar energy
to
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apply
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for
production
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the production
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drinking
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of drinking
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water
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. First of all the warm seawater passes through a pipe that will be heated by solar energy. When the
water
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 is properly heated it begins to turn the salt and vapour which go into the condensing chamber with the help of powerful turbines. During
this
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 time the separated salt after boiling the seawater is mixed with cold seawater
wich
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 1,000 meters deep than warm
water
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. Cold
water
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which
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apply
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is used as a capacitor
which
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apply
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through the influence
on
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of
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 the vapour
to remove
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removes
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 clean
water
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 and as a salt disposal that was obtained after boiling.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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