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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement program. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do

Dear
sir
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, I am a student of your
studying
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apply
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business
school
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 and I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention to the cancellation of the
summer
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work
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 placement
program
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. To commence with,
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, I choose your
school
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 for study to learn a different kind of opportunity like
work
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 in the company.
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,
This
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 only happened with attending
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work
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program
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 but yesterday I heard that
this
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summer
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program
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 was cancelled. Your
school
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 fees were extremely high comparatively
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another department
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.
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, I want to afford
this
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 because I know you are a student at a language
school
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 in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a
summer
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work
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 placement
program
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. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the
school
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 that
this
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 programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the
School
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 Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do at
this
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program
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 is beneficial for me.
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,
this
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program
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 was not held in the
summer
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 I want my 50% of the amount of fees back
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 I want to go to another college because I am very disappointed by
this
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. I hope you understand my whole problem and give a quick response regarding
this
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 to me. Yours faithfully, Steve Hopkins.

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coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs with a proper opening, body, and closing.
task response
Address the cancellation of the work placement program and your concerns in a more structured manner. Clearly state your request and expectations from the principal.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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