The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.
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These statistics illustrate the seven types of consumption by owners of cell phones from 2006, 2008 and 2010.
Overall
, most
folk
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folks
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used their phone
for
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to
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make calls,
while
the lowest number of people used
this
device
for
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to
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record videos.
According to
this
information, the number of people who made calls from their devices was roughly 100% in the period mentioned. Regarding the percentage of text messages, it was a second aim of usage of people in 2006, 2008 and 2010 by 73%, 75% and 79%, respectively.
Additionally
, the number of folks who used their phone to surf the net displayed a significant rise from 41% to 73% from 2008 to 2010.
It is clear that
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the percentage of playing games after a noticeable increase between 2006 and 2008, had a marginal decline from 42% in 2008 to 41% in 2010.
Moreover
, the per cent of playing music and recording videos did not exceed
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35% in the period of question.
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