In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In several countries, some
people
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large
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amount
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of money to prepare new
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tracks for fast types of
trains
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between cities, others think it is better to focus on developing the existing public transport. I personally agree with the first view because
trains
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can create many advantages for society.
People
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who believe
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amount
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of cash should be spent for
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of existing transport often argue that it is
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affordable way to increase the quality of
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. They believe the technological advancements allow authorities to create better standards in
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transportation
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.
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faster way than constructing a whole new
railway
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system which
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takes less time to reduce the number of problems in public
transportation
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.
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, governments can import or produce eco-friendly buses not only for the sake of minimizing the
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of pollution in the air
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but
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increasing
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of buses on the line. Despite the understandable reasons why
people
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believe money should be spent on
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transportation
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system, I believe
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the construction
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of new
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lines is
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option because one of the advantages of these
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is they can help
people
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to reach their workplace on time. These
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can easily avoid
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heavy traffic jams.
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, it is much safer to travel
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trains
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which usage of
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type of
transportation
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can reduce the
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of car accidents on the roads.
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trains
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in Tokyo succeed
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decreasing the
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of car
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. In conclusion,
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it is
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difficult and expensive way to improve the quality of public
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, countries should spend large sums of money
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constructing new
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lines for fast
trains
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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