In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In several countries, some
people
say governments should spent
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spend
large
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a large
amount
of money to prepare new Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
railway
tracks for fast types of trains
between cities, others think it is better to focus on developing the existing public transport. I personally agree with the first view because trains
can create many advantages for society.
People
who believe large
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a large
amount
of cash should be spent for improvement
of existing transport often argue that it is Correct article usage
the improvement
more
affordable way to increase the quality of Add an article
a more
transportation
. They believe the technological advancements allow authorities to create better standards in the
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transportation
. Also
, it is much
faster way than constructing a whole new Add an article
a much
railway
system which it
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transportation
. For example
, governments can import or produce eco-friendly buses not only for the sake of minimizing the amount
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also
increasing number
of buses on the line.
Despite the understandable reasons why Correct article usage
the number
people
believe money should be spent on current
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the current
transportation
system, I believe construction
of new Add an article
the construction
railway
lines is better
option because one of the advantages of these Add an article
a better
the better
trains
is they can help people
to reach their workplace on time. These people
can easily avoid the
heavy traffic jams. Correct article usage
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Secondly
, it is much safer to travel with
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by
trains
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train
this
type of transportation
can reduce the amount
of car accidents on the roads. For example
, very fast above ground
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above-ground
trains
in Tokyo succeed for
decreasing the Change preposition
in
amount
of car travels
.
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although
it is more
difficult and expensive way to improve the quality of public Add an article
a more
transportation
, countries should spend large sums of money for
constructing new Change preposition
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railway
lines for fast trains
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
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