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The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the details of the underground
railway
network
 in six several cities over the centuries.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the highest number of commuters frequently used the
railway
network
 in Tokyo,
while
 London has the oldest
railway
system
 with the longest
route
.
To begin
 with, in 1863, the underground train
network
 opened in London
along with
 a 394
km
route
, and 775
million
 travellers utilized
this
system
 every
year
. After 27 years second
railway
network
 opened in Paris, which has a 199
km
route
, and passengers used the train
system
 with shares at 1191
million
 per
year
.
Moreover
, 1927
million
 people often used the rail
network
 and travelled around 155
km
 in Tokyo, which was opened in 1927.
Furthermore
, another underground
railway
system
 was established in 1976 in Washington DC, which offers a 12km distance of the
route
, and 144
million
 people consume
this
network
 every
year
. It is interesting to note that, five years later, the new station opened in the city of Kyoto, which has a nominal margin of
route
 accounted of 11
km
 and 45
million
 locals preferred the
system
 every
year
. Meanwhile, the
last
 underground rail
system
 opened in Los Angeles in 2001 with a
route
 of 28
km
 with 50
million
 commuters per
year
.
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