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traffic jam is one problem forced by almost every large city. What do you think causes are. What solutions can you suggest.

#traffic #jam #city
Jam up happens today's one of the
difficult
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 situations in a big city. Exceeding a lot of types of transport and
as a result
 of people utilize like
this
 material
instead
 of public transport, in the end,
suchlike
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such like
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this
 matter is
occuring
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occurring
 presently. Well, For every person, being private cars is a
goodcircumstance
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good circumstance
, but it will become with some problems. If a car is used by every person, these things will bring to crash. To avoid these circumstances, we have to reduce putting use of cars
in other words
, we should multiply or pick out public transport.
Also
, these opportunities
is
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 convenient for users by finance.
For example
, in Columbia, most well-known people,
they
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apply
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select
choice
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a choice
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, as
writing
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written
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 down above. And they pay attention to
declining
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the declining
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pollutions
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pollution
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 of
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
. The smoke
of
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 cars is damaging nature.
Together with
 these, it
impactson
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impacts on
impacts
 living people's
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. As much as possible everyone must protect nature. Shortly, from those things, origin like these conclusions, everyone ought to follow given correct recommendations.
Finally
, everything
turn
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 into good sides. Without jams,
public
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 will be free.
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