There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work?

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of reasons that can drive people to
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with their job, have an opportunity to support others. I believe that the best encouragement to boost worker performance is to
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their basic needs based on their
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employment
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’s basic needs is one of the
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. There are five basic needs based on Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs theory, and those three basic needs are appropriate to drive
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, workers will perform better at their job when a
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provide adequate
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their basic needs
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bills,
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meals, and
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accommodation.
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, an
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employee
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employee
will focus to finish their
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targeted tasks as a workplace give a valid contract within the agreed timeframe,
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occupational health and
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,
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need refers to
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a sense of belonging and acceptance. To fulfill
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need, a
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can create a group of
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to
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together
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a project.
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the group and the
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two top Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs theory is to motivate mid-
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and senior
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has filled their previous needs.
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, after a long time of working and several years
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, they will seek other needs to accomplished which are self-esteem and self-actualization needs. In these stages, they will perform optimally when a
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appreciation of their
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the feedback from workers related
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certain project.
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, an opportunity to be promoted will drive the
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. They may
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need when they lead their subordinate when it leads to
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useful.
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, some ways that can encourage workers
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better in
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is by understanding the five basic needs based on their
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in the
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task response
The essay addresses the topic and provides a clear stance on the best motivation for good performance at work. Make sure to further develop and elaborate on each point to enhance the depth of analysis.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a well-structured introduction and conclusion. Work on connecting ideas more smoothly within paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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