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It is important for people to take risk, both in professional lives and personal lives. Do you think advantage of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there has been significant growth of modern startups In metropolitan cities, and mostly the younger generation is coming up with these new models. Because of
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 development professionals are taking risks in their careers
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 in their personal lives.
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, there are drawbacks
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 choosing a
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 different path in
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,
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 believe that
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 are even more significant. To commence with, the population is rapidly rising, and jobs are
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 limited, so it is the best opportunity for professionals to start their own business, which will ultimately give them financial freedom,
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 lifestyle and freedom of time, but all these benefits will only come with
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.
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, High
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 gives an unexpected reward.
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, the person who is ready to sacrifice their comfort zone in their personal
life
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, definitely all these initiatives
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 an individual to their dream world.
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, Mark Zuckerberg Founder of Facebook dropout of college and build a strong social media application which has an evaluation of 100 billion dollars, he achieved everything because of an excessive number of sacrifices.
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, it is an undeniable fact that out of 100
startups
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 only 5 to 6 became successful, so the probability of success after taking
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risk
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 in
life
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 is negligible, and the major reason behind
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 cause is, that people do not have a backup plan and they are not well skilled.
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, it is ok to not to choose a different path, which can ruin
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. In a recent survey, Forbes published a report that disclosed data of the persons who took risks and started their businesses, out of which only 10% got success, which directly indicates if the
risk
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 is not calculated
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 do not take it. In a nutshell, each aspect has its pros and cons.
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, there is a probability of failure in taking risks in the career,
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all these sacrifices can give financial freedom and luxury lifestyle.
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, it
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 helps in generating more jobs, which gives an opportunity to other people explore themselves.
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