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Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables, they are worth the extra cost. Do you agree or disagree?

#fruits #vegetables #cost
Considering one of the most significant
problem
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 in the world - increasing productivity of agriculture to feed
growing
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the growing
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 population - it can be said that all alternatives
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as
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 organic food are
worht
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worth
 any
resourses
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resources
, including money, time and etc.
As a result
, some
persons
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people
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 consider that
price
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the price
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 for
such
 products is quite understandable and
berable
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bearable
. So, only partly do I. The first thing which should be mentioned is that farmers really make a lot of
afforts
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efforts
effort
 to protect, grow and transport fresh fruits and vegetables to the consumers: all listed activities are absolutely hard to do without using any pesticides and other additives (plus, always-growing prices for
everithing
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everything
),
also
such
 eco-products can
requires
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 a lot of examination for the presence of harmful substances and the absence of genetically modified changes (in some countries) - all that can be harder to make for small farmers
then
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than
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 for huge producers,
for instance
. That's why I believe that price is normal and
ought
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 be accepted.
Further
,
also
 can be taken into consideration is that there still can exist a lot of dishonest
produsers
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producers
 and farmers, smugglers who even
dont't
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don't
 care about
quality
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the quality
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 of their production. Usually
such
kind
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kinds
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 of
enterprenuours
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entrepreneurs
 work illegally or simply can lie to their customers that
offering
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offer
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 fruits and vegetables match the demanding quality and etc, in
turn
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 to get
extra-revenue
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extra revenue
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. Eventually, it can lead to wasting money and unjustified expectation. And it's a reason why I can't fully agree with
this
 statement. Concluding all information, it can be said that, of course, growing organic fruits and vegetables is
absolutely
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an absolutely
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briliant
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brilliant
 idea, especially for people who are worried
abot
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about
 their health, but in
reality
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,reality
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 everything doesn't
functionate
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function
 well and with compliance with all rules.
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