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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The given maps demonstrate the current manufacturing plants in the town of Norbiton and describe the
well structured
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 future
plan
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 for the development of the location.
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 with, the current site is surrounded by only
factories
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 and a river,
total
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 of 7
factories
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 are currently working in the city. On the left side of the river, a large farmland is located.
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, there is only one way which connects all the
factories
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. If we look into the future
plan
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, all
factories
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 will be replaced by
the
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housing, and around 6 new housing buildings will be constructed, out of which only one building will be built on the farmland.
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, commercial shops, medical
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,
playground
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 and new
school
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 will be constructed in the place of
factories
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.
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, the future
plan
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 will be more environment friendly
becuase
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because
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plan
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 there will be no industries.
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, a river will be divided by a pull which will connect a housing community with other communities

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, factories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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