In some countries, student pay their college or university fees, while in some others, the government pays for them. Do the advantages of governments paying for fees outweigh the disadvantages.

Firstly
I would say
education
is more important now a day for students. So many
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have their own educational terms and conditions Students are paying
there
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fees
for
collages
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colleges
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in some provisional.and some
counties
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county's
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government
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governments
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are providing
this
facility. In my
opinion
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if
government
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the government
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is paying
fees
for
education
it will be very helpful
below
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grade income parents . They can
also
think to send their child
for
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schooling. It will
very
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benificial
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beneficial
as a citizen of
country
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the country
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all people are
literates
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down
also
for
economical
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growth
country
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the country
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will be in a good position . There are
also
disadvantages if
government
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the government
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are paying
fees
for school.
Moreover
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parents are not serious about
education
and colleges. They are thinking
like
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that it's
a
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free of cost so they are taking very lightly to
education
and not sending their child to school.
Government
if
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is
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not taking any
fees
so in future they can face many funicular
problem
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to
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managing the college and
also
paying the salary of staff and teachers. It will
also
effect
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affect
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economically
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them economically
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and
also
so many will not get
wedge
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a wedge
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of pay.
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