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In the present era, children have fewer responsibilities than in the past. Some people consider this as a positive development, others see it as a negative trend. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Every generation has its own unique quirks,
this
 one being that life is
overall
 easier for everyone, especially children, who now have fewer responsibilities. Some
people
 argue that
such
 a change is bad,
others
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while others
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 think it is a positive development. In my opinion, the latter is true, my essay will be discussing the argument provided.
To begin
 with, teenagers having
less
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 things to worry about may be considered a bad trend,
people
 who go through
few
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 hardships usually grow up to be irresponsible,
therefore
 the entire next generation might be worse off than the previous ones. Another thing that comes into play is critical thinking, a child who has everything handed to them on a silver platter is less likely to plan, observe and think for themselves in a tough situation. Many cases can be provided as an example,
such
 as signing contracts, mechanical repairs and etc. Adolescents conditioned to tricky situations through trial and error are more likely to get by in adulthood without major issues, compared to those who have not. Looking at the bright side, children spending their golden years relatively
stress free
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 is a great improvement.
People
 who had to worry less in childhood are highly likely to be mentally healthy. Rationally thinking citizens, without any
pent up
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 exactly what society needs in order to function. Another argument for
this
 is that adolescents who do not have to worry about earning money or responsibilities can focus on
self improvement
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 and their studies, leading to a much more educated generation. In conclusion, both points of view have a right to exist. Some
people
 think that it is a negative trend,
others
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 believe it to be a positive development. As mentioned before downsides and upsides are present, but in my opinion, it is a change in the right direction.
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