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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, the need for public
transport
 is increasing day by day. Communities are preferring public
transport
 rather than their own vehicles, the ruling authorities have a plan to invest money in the development of railways as compared to national and state highways.
According to
 the demand, I would disagree and believe that the government should equally distribute funds for the growth of both modes of
transport
. To commence with, in metropolitan
cities
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 more than 90% of the people prefer public buses to travel to their offices, shops or for meetings.
Moreover
, the cost of
this
 mode of
transport
 is negligible,
that is
 why demand is rising, as a matter of
fact
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 the government should invest a large amount of money to develop better road infrastructure with excellent connectivity to all parts of the cities
,
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 so that it will comfortable for each individual to travel at any place.
For instance
, Chandigarh territory of India where the government have spent around 80% of the funds to develop better highways, where traffic is very less and it is called the best-planned city in the nation.
However
, rather than just roads the demand for metro trains is
also
 rising, because of
its
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 two benefits, a cheap cost and it runs on electricity
that is
 environmentally friendly.
Additionally
, it has better connectivity than roads and no issue of traffic jams,
as a
result
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 it saves the time of travelling. Delhi is the capital of India where the ruling authorities have spent millions to build a strong metro train connectivity around the complete city. All in all, each aspect has its pros and cons.
Although
, metro trains have a significant number of benefits,
but
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the cost of building these projects is 10 times more than the road infrastructure.
Thus
, the ruling authorities should equally distribute money depending upon the condition of the cities and
then
 develop infrastructure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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