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The first pie chart below shows European Union member state shares of installed capacity of renewable egergy for last year. The second pie chart below shows the breakdown for Germany's sources of renewable energy, also for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first pie chart below shows European Union member state shares of installed capacity of renewable egergy for last year. The second pie chart below shows the breakdown for Germany's sources of renewable energy, also for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie graph depicts the amount of natural
energy
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 installation in the eleven main European Union (EU) countries and other members for
last
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 year. The second pie chart presents the breakdown of different types of natural
energy
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 resources in
Germany
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 for the same period of the year as the first graph.
Overall
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,
Germany
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 had the most storage capacity for clean
energy
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 resources which contributed to
wind
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 power.
It is clear that
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 the figures for the natural
energy
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 installation in
Germany
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 were dramatically higher than the rest of the EU members, it accounted for approximately a quarter of the total at 22%.
Following
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this
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, the Uk, Spain and Italy experienced a similar number of installation capacities with 13%. 11% and 10% respectively. There was by far less storage capacity of renewable
energy
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 in France, Sweden, Poland, Portugal and Greece, the range from 9 to 3%. With regards to "Other" is not specified and they placed natural
energy
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 with 10%. Looking into the details of the natural power use in
Germany
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, the vast majority of
energy
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 resources came from the
wind
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 with 40.4%. Followed by hydro and Biomass, they were made up only 20.3% and 19.8 respectively, were roughly half of
wind
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energy
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. It is a pity that solar
energy
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 was used only 6.6%
last
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 year. In summary, it is apparent that
Germany
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 is the most capable country to store natural
energy
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 among EU countries and
wind
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 power was efficiently used in the most resourceful country.
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