The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
The table illustrates information about the expenditure of the UK people on various 4 items
such
as food,electronic equipment,
music
and videos in the year 1998.
However
,units had been mentioned in Percentages.
Overall
it is clear that
teenagers were the biggest consumers of electronic equipment and
music
whereas
adults spend most on foodstuff rather than all other items.
Although
,
boys
were the biggest consumer of all various items. In terms of expenditures on food , women got the highest ranking with 39% spending and teenagers (including
boys
,girls and children) were spending very small amounts between 9% and 11% on food as compared to electronic equipment which was highly prefered by children and
boys
as they spend 23% and 18% respectively
whereas
women spent smallest income only 1%.
On the other hand
,
music
was highly prefered by all of the young generation
such
as
boys
,girls and children as they spend 38% ,40% and 39% respectively
whereas
aged people spend 5% on
music
as compared to videos which were most precious among
boys
as they spent 18% on it
while
women spent 0.5% on videos.
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