The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram presents the yearly
income
data of three bakeries in Calgary between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, Amandine Bakery's earnings in recent
years
rise significantly when compared to those of
Bolo
Cakey. Mari Bakeshop’s
income
falls continuously despite the rise in the early
years
.
First,
the annual
income
of Mari Bakeshop in 2010 was 80,000. It fluctuated between 2001 and 2004 at around 90,000 and 80,000.
However
, it
then
experienced a huge drop from 90,000 in 2004 to 40,000 in 2010. Next, Amandine Bakery’s earning was nearly 60,000 in 2000. Interestingly, it remained the same until 2005.
Then
, it experienced a considerable rise from 2006 at 60,000 to around 100,000 in 2010.
Lastly
, the
income
of
Bolo
Cakery fluctuated in the early
years
. It was at 20,000 in 2000. It rose to nearly 40,000 in 2003 and
then
remained the same for almost 4
years
. The
income
started rising in 2006 from 40,000 to 60,000 in 2008. After that, it rose slightly from that of 2008. In conclusion, the trends of Amandine Bakery and
Bolo
Cakery were similar, but the Amadine earnings were higher than those of
Bolo
Cakery. The Mari Bakeshop
income
became the lowest
income
in recent
years
after witnessing an enormous drop.
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