The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates several steps of how soft cheese is produced in the factory.
It is clear that
there are 5 main stages in
this
process, starting with the combination of water
together with
milk and ending with the finished result as soft cheese is made. As can be seen, during the first step, milk is mixed carefully with water, and
then
the mixture is cooled at 5
degrees
Celsius for 2 hours. After that, salt is added to the liquid before undergoing the process of fermentation by heating it up at 35
degrees
Celsius within a period of 6 hours. Later in the fourth stage, once fermented, the evaporation procedure is carried out to let off steam as the combination keeps being cooked at the temperature of 100
degrees
for 8 hours.
Finally
, the mixture is frozen again at 5
degrees
to become thicker and two filters are used to separate the resulting soft cheese and wastewater.
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