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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in thw uk between 1971 and 2001.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in thw uk between 1971 and 2001.
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The presented pie chart illustrates the careers of people who
graduates
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graduate
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 from a university after
Anthropology
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an Anthropology
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 degree course
while
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 the table gives information about how much money they make for living in their
work
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 after five years. From the
overall
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 perspective, it can be clearly seen that over
a
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apply
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half of fresh graduates choose
full time
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full-time
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work
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 as soon as they have graduated, and after five years, 50 per
cent
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 of employees in
government
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the government
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 sector can earn money the most. There are five kinds of choices for Anthropology graduates to make a living after finishing the degree course. There are 52 per
cent
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 of graduate students who
work
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 full-time.
Gratuated
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Graduate
Graduated
 students choose
further
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 study for post-graduate and anthropologists who cannot be determined what they do have the same amount of percentage.There are 5 per
cent
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 of anthropologists who
work
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 part-time and study postgraduate.15 per
cent
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 of anthropology students
works
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work
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 part-time
while
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 12 per
cent
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 of them cannot still find a job. After 5 year's
work
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,5 per
cent
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 of employees in freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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 sector get
salary
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salaries
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 ranging from 25000
dollars
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 to 49,999
dollars
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while
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 15 per
cent
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 of them get it from 50,000
dollars
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 to 74,999
dollors
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dollars
. There
are
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40 per
cent
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 of employment
in
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apply
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Freelance consultants who get between 75,000
dollars
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 and 99,999
dollars
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 . People whose salaries are over 100,000
dollars
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 are 40 per
cent
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 in
freelance
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a freelance
the freelance
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consultant
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consultants
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, 5o per
cent
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 in
government
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the government
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 sector and 30 per
cent
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 in
private
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a private
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 company
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, cent, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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