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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Grange
Park
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 was opened in 1920, a rectangular
area
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 with access from Amold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the centre, with a stage for musicians situated centre left, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon Street entrance and a pond for
water
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 plants in the northeast corner opposite Around the edges of the
park
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 there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for people to smell the flowers and listen to music. The
park
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 has altered considerably since
then
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. Now there is one large-ish rose garden occupying the central
area
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 where the fountain stood, with seats all around it. One of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the
park
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. The bandstand (stage for musicians) has
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 been replaced, by an amphitheatre for concerts and associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its place is a
water
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 feature
similarly
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, where the pond for
water
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 plants stood there is now a children's play
area
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 with a café nearby. Access to the
park
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 is still via the two original entrances, but there is now a third entrance near the
water
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 feature from an underground car
park
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 Despite the apparently significant changes, the
park
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 retains the basic elements of flowers,
water
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, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children's play
area
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