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The graph below deppicts information about British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

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The given bar chart illustrates information about emigration in the UK to
chose
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choose
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 five different destinations from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
, it can clearly
seen
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be seen
see
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 that Australia was the popular destination
in
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for
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 British Emigration,
while
 the least famous countries were New Zealand and the USA over the given period. Looking at the information in more detail, in British Emigration more than 40,000
people
 went to Australia and it decreased to around 39,000 in the next year. There was a significant rise to about 52,000
people
 in 2006 before falling to 42,000 in the
last
 year. As regards Spain, the number of
people
selected
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who selected
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 Spain
for
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as
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 their
destinations
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destination
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 was around 32,000 to 35,000 for the early three years;
this
 figure dropped to approximately 37,000 in 2007.
As
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With
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respects
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respect
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 to
other
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the other
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 three destinations, there was a gradual decrease in New Zealand
destination
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destinations
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 over the given period from around 23,000 to 20,000. Meanwhile, around 25,000
people
 chose
USA
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the USA
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for
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as
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 their destination in 2004 and 2006. The highest number of
people
 who went to France over the period was around 33,000 in 2005.
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