The line chart shows exports in billions of dollars

The line chart shows exports in billions of dollars
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The line graph illustrates the exportation rates of Australia to four countries ( Japan, the US, China and India) between 1990 to 2012.
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, the percentage of Australian goods exported to China increased dramatically over the time period which coincides with the moderate decrease in the number of exports to Japan and the US
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the exportation rate to India was stagnant for a
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it experienced a gradual rise followed by a minor decline
at the end
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of the period. The proportion of Australian exports to China started out at a tiny fraction in 1990 which
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continued to increase gradually until a sharp growth from slightly above 10% in 2005 to approximately 25% in 2010 as it reached almost 27% in 2012. The exportation rate from Australia to India was at a plateau from 1990 to 2000
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it rose dramatically to about 7% in 2010 and a slight drop to well under 10% in 2012 The percentage of exported goods from Australia to Japan was at around 26% in 1990 before it experienced a downward trend over the time period until it was almost 18% in 2012
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the Australian goods sent to the US experienced some fluctuations until it decreased gradually to reach around 5% in 2010 and it rose marginally to approximately 7% in 2012
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