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There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions?

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presently, there is an increasing
demand
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 for clean
water
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 and
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problem
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 is international. In the following
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 I will discuss the reasons behind it and provide some solutions for each
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. The first reason
of
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growing
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the growing
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demand
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 for
water
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 is that the depletion of underwater sources becomes a serious issue.
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water
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 withdrawal from underwater sources brings many
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problem
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(s) for
the
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people all around the world.
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, In Iran, many wells and aqueducts began to drought because of
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excessive
water
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 waste. To address the issue, rationing the remaining
water
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 might be a practical approach in order for
wasting
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water
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 reduction. The government plays an important role in controlling
water
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 usage. Overpopulation might be another reason
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/
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)increasing
demand
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. Presently, the world’s
population
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 is increasing every day.
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, it is very likely that the
demand
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 has
also
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 risen to some extent.
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, if the
population
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 increases from 8 billion to 10 billion in the entire world(,) the
water
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 withdrawal may increase to 30%, which may lead to acute
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 shortages. In
the
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other word, the more of the
population
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(,) the less
of
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the
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
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. To tackle the
problem
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,constructing some large treatment plants might be another beneficial approach in order to overcome
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 obstacle. In conclusion,
an
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excessive
water
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 withdrawal and
population
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 congestion are the reasons why the
demand
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 for clean
water
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 is increasing every day.
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, the government plays an important role to address each issue. rationing the global
water
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 and erecting large treatment
plant
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plants
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 are practical ways in order to solve the
problem
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 with the government.
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