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Write about the following topic. There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Living in different places around the globe is what a number of
people
 prefer. There has been an ongoing discussion as to what extent they are permitted to roam freely in places they opt to stay. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the advantages
as well as
 the disadvantages of
this
 kind of
set-up
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setup
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.
To begin
 with, being able to experience different cultures in different nations is truly an adventure some
people
 enjoy. Travelling from one place to another, eating foods that
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the area
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area
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are
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 specializes
,
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in, getting
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getting
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and getting
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 to know a lot of personalities are just a few of the pros of being a
jetsetter
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jet setter
. Setting an example from my friend's experience who happens to be a citizen of the world, she has a lot of stories to tell regarding the places she's been. She is very versatile and can adjust to
people
 easily whoever she is talking to.
However
, there is always another side of the coin. In my opinion, it is so hard to have a steady income when
your
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you're
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 always transferring from different areas. Travelling is costly and you need enough money to fund your
day to day
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day-to-day
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 activities. Oftentimes,
this
 may lead to being broke and just
depend
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depending
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 on the government's subsidy, which is an added burden to the areas
concern
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. Whilst many
people
 prefer
trasferring
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transferring
 to different areas because of the satisfaction it gives them, they should
also
 consider the cost of living it entails.
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