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The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.

The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.
The line graph demonstrates data for revenue of goods in billions of dollars within four countries from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, The United States and China experienced upward trends with the United States at the top during the whole period. Japan's domestic gross declined
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 the United Kingdom fluctuated. Amongst the countries that expanded their product profit, the United States was the leading figure during the period, starting from 15,000 in 2010 and continuing to become roughly 18,000 in 2015, 7,000 digits more than the second competitor. China experienced a steep increase beginning at approximately 6,000 a little more than 11,000. Among countries that had different trends, Japan was the only nation seeing a decline in product revenue. Beginning from nearly 5,800, which had been only a little less than China, their numbers fell to 4,900 in 2015. The United Kingdom,
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, fluctuated during
this
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 half decade and consistently produced a domestic gross of 3,000.

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