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Many people nowadays live in societies where consumer goods are relatively cheap Do you thing the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, lots of
people
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 live in a world where consumer
goods
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 are quite cheap. In my opinion, in
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 situation, the advantages do not outweigh the
disadvantages
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.
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,
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 practice of buying cheap
products
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 has lots of
disadvantages
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. One of the
disadvantages
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 is environmental pollution, the other one can be a waste of
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 on unnecessary
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, rather than investing
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 in something more important. The only advantage that I can see in doing
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 practice is that poor
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 can afford to buy more
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 for their life. And
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 will make their everyday life easier and more comfortable by allowing them to buy cheap
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. Moving on to the
disadvantages
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, I think that the main disadvantage is environmental pollution because lots of
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 are really cheap and some
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 have the tendency to buy them without thinking about the consequences of all of those
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 on the environment after their usage. The cheapest
products
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 are, the more enquired it will be. Society has the tendency to buy
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 even if they will not use them, but they think that all of these
goods
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 will make their life easier.
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,
people
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 do not take into account that they waste
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 on unnecessary
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. And from there results the second main disadvantage, and
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 is that
people
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 waste
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 on unnecessary
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 rather than investing
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money
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 in some sort of business, or just making a donation and helping helpless
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 or animals. Conclude I can say that before somebody decides to buy unnecessary
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 they should think very carefully, or at least on all of these
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 government should apply a tax on recycling. As well I think that should be an advertising policy that will be shown the result of buying
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 that
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 don’t need for nature and animals.
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