The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries.

The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries.
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The bar chart demonstrates the distinct home events with computer
games
, reading, board
games
, and watching tv among young children in four specific countries: Malaysia, China,
Nigeria
,
Sudan
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and Sudan
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.
Overall
, in all countries,
whereas
computer
games
are the most popular activity, reading is a less popular event.
While
computer
games
have a significant proportion of 60% with its highest
ratio
in
Nigeria
, it has a
ratio
of 40% with its lowest rate in China. When it comes to the board
games
, it has at the same
ratio
of 25% in Malaysia and China,
although
,
Nigeria
and Sudan have a different
ratio
, with 20%, and 30%, respectively. It can be clearly said that watching tv has
exactly
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an exactly
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equal
ratio
in all of them. Though reading has a rate of 20% in Malaysia, it has a
ratio
of 10 in
Nigeria
and Sudan.
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