some people support the developments in agriculture such as factory farming and creations of new types of fruit and vegetables,while others oppose this view,Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, with the rapid growth of population,more and more
people
pay more attention to agricultural production.Some people
state that using advanced technology in farming systems is necessary for people
. The opposite side holds it could pose a serious threat to human well-being.I believe that people
can be benefits
from the use of advanced technology.
Wrong verb form
benefit
Firstly
,some viewpoints argue that traditional farming methods have more advantages in terms of health and safety.In ancient times,all of the farming products including vegetables and fruit were planted without fertilizers and pesticides,and animals could be fed natural food
such
as grass in the wild or pests,They stand against the abuses of factory farming.people
eating organic food
will have much better physical health,as well as
natural
feeding animals Change the word
naturally
obey
their value point.Correct subject-verb agreement
obeys
Moreover
,new types of vegetable and factory farming have many unpredictable risks for people
's well-being,such
as whether it would cause genetic diseases or the potential danger of pesticides.
Secondly
,with the significantly increasing population , of earth,the shortage of food
has become the most serious issue,But this
condition has been reversed by high-tech development.Modern farmers using automatic machines improve efficiency and productivity, as well as
reduce labour costs.Therefore
, it is ensured that every individual can eat cheap and sufficient food
every day without the influence of bad weather conditions and differences.Meanwhile, various agricultural products also
have a positive effect on the global economy.A thriving economy can bring a positive cycle to the whole world.
In conclusion, although
some people
are concerned about the safety of new agricultural products.However
,I believe that modern technical methods can be used to solve people
's survival issues.Submitted by guojingchang0426 on
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