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Intelligent machines such as robots are widely applied to take the place of human beings. Please discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays, smart
robots
 are increasingly replacing
humans
 in their
jobs
. The use of Intelligent
robots
 has highly reduced the dependency on human labour which in turn has increased the efficiency required to do the
jobs
.
However
, it poses a significant threat to the
people
 who do menial
jobs
 as their employment has become vulnerable. The trend of
robots
 substituting
humans
 has been seen mainly in low-skill
jobs
. One of the reasons is that it is less expensive than hiring and training the employee. The capabilities of smart
robots
 are far beyond
humans
 as they tend to have the ability to do the
work
 of more
humans
. Assembly line
work
 in manufacturing companies can be a good example of a job which has seen an increase in
robots
. Highly advanced
machines
 equipped with sophisticated artificial intelligence have taken the place of the
people
 working the assembly line. These
machines
 can
work
 non-stop, yielding more output for the company
whereas
 the human can
work
 only for several hours a day, taking a few days off in a week as well. Apparently, Employers tend to invest the
robots
instead
 of
people
 since seeing the advantages of these advanced
machines
. The main disadvantage of the use of intelligent
machines
 as they direct affects the common
people
 who are involved in menial or low-skilled
jobs
. They may lose their job and
due to
 a lack of skills, it becomes really tough for them to find the other job. It not only serves an adverse effect on their employment but
also
their
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 family and the country as well. The state can't afford to keep these
people
 unemployed as a family is
also
 dependent on these
people
 or else the economy of the country may collapse as unemployment is one of the major factors behind inflation. It is the duty of the government to provide upskilling for these
people
 so they can be employable in different types of
jobs
 which are not affected by smart
robots
. In conclusion,
although
, the inevitable rise of Intelligent
machines
 in the place of
work
 is taking the place of human are beneficial for employers, and pose a direct threat to
people
 doing menial
jobs
. The necessary interference of the government may help the
people
, who are the on constant verge of losing their
jobs
, to land highly skilled
jobs
.
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