The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.

The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.
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The table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the Republic of Ireland based on the category of the movie in the year 2012. There are 9 genres and 5 of all parole and income from the sales tickets in the table.
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, in the comedy movie sum of leniency is 26, its % is 17.6 and it is 45.4. In horror discharge is 14, its % is 9.5 and its income is 20.2. In the biopic, drama, and action sum of clemency and % of full discharge and % profits is recepactitiviety 1, 35, and 4, 0.7, 23.6 and 2.7, and 9.1,8.3, 4.1. In the crime no. of mercy is 7 and in % of mercy and % profit from sell is equal it 4.7. From the documentary, thriller and romance earning is 2.9,1.3, and 0.8. In the thriller and romance no. of compassion is 13 and 5. The % of the mercy of thriller and romance is 3.4 and 5.4. The other total of compassion is 8, % of releases is 5.4 and % of earnings is 3.2. The total of the genre is 148,
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the sum of clemency is 100and % gain by selling 100. In conclusion, the total % of all discharge and % of the gain is equal. The highest earning is from comedy. The low gain is from love story movies. The ablow information shows the data for 2012. The ablow data is about films released in the UK.
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  • illustrates
  • independent films
  • categories
  • released
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • overall patterns
  • specific numbers
  • analyze
  • popular
  • themes
  • less likely
  • explored
  • independent cinema
  • significant disparities
  • data analysis
  • terminology
  • genres
  • descriptive terms
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