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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that high school
students
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 should be forced to
work
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 in community service without being paid as a part of education programmes. I personally believe that
life
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skills
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 become more and more important in our modern
life
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 and by doing voluntary
work
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students
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 not only can improve their valuable
skills
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 but
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 encourage them to have a healthy
life
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 balance.
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, I totally agree with the idea of forcing
students
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 to
work
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 in charity organizations. Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many after-school
activities
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,
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moreover
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 youth clubs are less popular and attractive than screen
time
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activities
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.
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, after going back home from educational institutions,
students
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 tend to spend their spare
time
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 sitting to play video games,
browsing
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and browsing
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 the internet as a way of entertainment that may cause a sedentary lifestyle. If
students
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 take part in voluntary
activities
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such
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 as teaching a sport
for
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 kids or helping the disabled do
houseworks
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housework
house works
 that can encourage them to use their
time
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 more meaningfully and enhance their health. I
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 think that by giving pupils compulsory
work
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activities
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 in community
centers
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centres
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, they will have more opportunities to do more new things. It is a great chance to learn how to communicate with others,
work
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 as a team more effectively, manage their
time
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 and improve their organization
skills
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 which are practical to learn from real
life
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instead
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 of textbooks or lectures. Those
skills
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 gained through compulsory
work
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 may be an asset on their CV and be an advantage in their future employability or scholarships. In conclusion, I think
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 is a good idea, and I hope
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 programme will
be introduce
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 in high educational institutions in the future.
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