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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that high school
students
 should be forced to
work
 in community service without being paid as a part of education programmes. I personally believe that
life
skills
 become more and more important in our modern
life
 and by doing voluntary
work
students
 not only can improve their valuable
skills
 but
also
 encourage them to have a healthy
life
 balance.
Therefore
, I totally agree with the idea of forcing
students
 to
work
 in charity organizations. Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many after-school
activities
,
moreover
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 youth clubs are less popular and attractive than screen
time
activities
.
Therefore
, after going back home from educational institutions,
students
 tend to spend their spare
time
 sitting to play video games,
browsing
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and browsing
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 the internet as a way of entertainment that may cause a sedentary lifestyle. If
students
 take part in voluntary
activities
such
 as teaching a sport
for
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 kids or helping the disabled do
houseworks
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housework
house works
 that can encourage them to use their
time
 more meaningfully and enhance their health. I
also
 think that by giving pupils compulsory
work
activities
 in community
centers
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, they will have more opportunities to do more new things. It is a great chance to learn how to communicate with others,
work
 as a team more effectively, manage their
time
 and improve their organization
skills
 which are practical to learn from real
life
instead
 of textbooks or lectures. Those
skills
 gained through compulsory
work
 may be an asset on their CV and be an advantage in their future employability or scholarships. In conclusion, I think
this
 is a good idea, and I hope
this
 programme will
be introduce
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 in high educational institutions in the future.
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