The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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The bar graph illustrates the information about the

Agriculture

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Industry

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and services sector contribution to India's GDP between 1960 to 2000.

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period services have invested a lot in India GDP's compared to

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and

industry

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. In ,contrast

Agriculture

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was seeing a drastic drop by 2000. In regard to

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, 40 years ago they started with a 63% contribution and being the maximum contributor to India's GDP compared to the other sectors, but slowly it followed a reversal trend where the percentage is 15% by 2000.

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sector was gradually growing with a 5% difference from 1960 to 1980 and it became stable for the next years and ended at 25% by 2020.

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, year by year the growth of the service

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in the contribution is increasing and It shows the opposite view of

agriculture

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and achieved the proportion that

agriculture

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was providing in 1960 as 60%

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