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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. to what extent do you agree or disagee?

#people #climate #change #disagee
Climate
change
endanger
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 life on earth,
while
 some
people
 emphasize accepting it, rather than stopping it. I completely disagree with
this
 idea, because I believe that we have time to decrease the impact on humanity on the Earth's
climate
 and solve
this
 problem. There are various actions that governments and
people
 take in order to prevent
climate
change
 or soften at least governments can enact the law to limit the carbon dioxide emissions that cause global warming. They could tax the drivers, avia-company and
pollutant
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with''green
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with green
taxes''and
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taxes and
 invest the money to produce renewable energy from sun, wind or water energy. As individuals, we have to try to limit our contribution to
climate
change
 by saving energy, less flying and using public transport.
Furthermore
, society should influence the actions of the government by voting policies that
offers
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 to struggle with
climate
change
 as opposed to
people
 who prefer not to pay attention to it. If we tried to live with
climate
change
,
instead
 of taking measures, I believe, the consequences would be fatal. Taking an example, I am not optimistic to be tolerated
to
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rising the sea level. Millions of
people
 would be evacuated because of flood, especially, in the country which did not have means of protection
of
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 low-lying areas. These
people
 would lose their working and living places and they have to migrate the near cities or other countries. The potential of suffering humanity would be huge and we can undergo outbreakings of famine and illnesses,
as well as
 getting stronger poverty and homelessness. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we should tackle the issue of
climate
change
 and I do not agree to find a way to live with
climate
change
.
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