At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, the inhabitant of some nations includes a relatively large

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of youth

adults

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, compared with the

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of elderly

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. In my opinion,

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percentage

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compared to senior

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outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, The primary disadvantage of a lack in

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can have a negative impact on the economy of the country.

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companies

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run

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older

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because they have plenty of

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to deal with challenges in

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compared to young

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of older

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can job market.

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of young

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than older

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. The first advantage, more youth

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means more workforce available. To illustrate, young

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have more energy and healthy body than older

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, more young

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can engage in

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the pressure on the healthcare system is another advantage of having

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percentage of young

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than senior

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vulnerable than older

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serious diseases namely, heart attack, cancer,

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, the government can save a considerable amount of money related to

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people

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, In my perspective, the upsides of having

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of young

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compared to elderly

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outpeform

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outperform

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because more youth

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means more

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can enhance the economy of

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the country

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minimize

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the pressure on the healthcare system.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Fully explain your ideas

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