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The charts below shows male and female arrested over the 5 years and the reason for most recent arrests. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows male and female arrested over the 5 years and the reason for most recent arrests. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart indicates the percentage of arrested
males
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 and
females
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 from 1989 to 1994, and the bar graph gives information about the cause of the most recent
arrests
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.
Males
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 predominated in the
number
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 of crimes over the five-year period, and public drinking was the most major reason for the arrest of both genders. The proportion of crimes committed by
males
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 almost quadrupled (32%) compared to the
number
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 for
females
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, which accounted for only 9 %. It is apparent that the majority reason for the
arrests
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 in both genders were drinking in public and those figures occupied over 30% among seven
reasons
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; 30.5% in
males
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 and 37% in
females
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. The figure for drinking and driving in men consisted of a quarter of the total which placed the second highest
number
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 of
reasons
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 for the
arrests
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. The rest of the
arrests
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,
such
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 as other
reasons
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, breach of the order, and assault were 19%, 17%, and 15.5% respectively. It was just below 5% of male crimes who did not want to answer the reason for their
arrests
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.
On the other hand
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, there have been some differences in the
reasons
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 for
arrests
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 between men and women. The second largest percentage of the arrest was an assault in
females
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 which almost halved (18%) compared to those figures for public drinking, followed by other
reasons
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 at 17%, drinking and driving at 14%, breach of order and theft was 12%. In terms of no answer,
this
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 case had the least percentage (7%) in
females
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 and a similar
number
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 was observed in
males
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.
Overall
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, arrested
males
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 occupied a third of the total and the figures of the
reasons
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 for the
arrests
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 in both genders varied apart from public drinking.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, arrests, number, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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