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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days,
majority
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 of
parents
 have not been aware to take
care
 of their
children
 by themselves. They will likely pass the role to some relatives or even
day
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daycare
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care
. I believe that the best way to educate and take
care
 of
children
 is by their own
parents
 which
i
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 will discuss
it
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in
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Firstly
, when relatives have the role to take
care
the
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children
, it is trustworthy because we have already known the person.
However
, our families don't have any
procedure
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procedures
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 when it comes to
take
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taking
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care
the
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 child. They don't have the responsibility to teach and educate them. Another option is to bring our
children
 to the
day
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daycare
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care
. They will have the procedure and
taking
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care
 of our
children
 because we
payed
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paid
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 for it. So we don't have to
be worry
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worry
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 about the responsibility to our
children
.
Parents
 should be more careful and aware to find good
institution
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institutions
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. Because they will hand the
children
 to a complete stranger.
However
, not everyone can provide childcare because the fee is very expensive. In conclusion, it is alright for
parents
 to put
a
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trust in relatives and
day
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daycare
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care
 when it comes to taking
care
 of the
children
 after some research and consideration, but
parents
 should be taking
care
 of their own
children
,
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 so that they can have close
relationship
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relationships
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, when they have grown up they will be aware the importance of
parents
 presence, they will feel comfortable around them.
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