The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants.

The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of energy distribution in
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Australian
household
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households
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,
,
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apply
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However
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the table depicts the proportion number of usage electricity
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occupants per year in the units measured by kilowatts per year.
overall
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, it's clear that Heating and cooling presented the highest ratio of energy consumption volume around 38% and 25% of the whole total.
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cooking occupied the high figure about approximately 4%
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stand power stead
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the same level in 3%kiloatt
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