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The diagrama shows the process of water cycle, in which water moves from the surface of Earth into air and eventually returns to land.

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The
diagrama
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diagram
 shows the process of
water
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the water
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 cycle, in which
water
 moves from the surface of
Earth
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the Earth
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 into
air
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the air
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 and eventually returns to land. In the picture, it can be noticed three main stages:
Ocean
water
 evaporates, falls as rain, and
finally
 returns into the
ocean
 again. In the first stage, it can be seen that 80% of
water
 vapour in the air comes from the
ocean
. Sun's heat causes
water
 to evaporate, and
water
 vapour condenses to form clouds.
At
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 the second stage, the process
called
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is called
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 "precipitation" in which
water
 falls as rain or snow. And the
last
 stage of the cycle of
water
 is when rainwater takes various paths. Some
water
form
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from
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 lake or go back to the
ocean
 as groundwater. In
other
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another
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 way, rainwater may reach the impervious layer of the earth. The
prosses
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process
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 of
salt
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saltwater
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water
 intrusion takes place before entering
water
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the water
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to
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into
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 the
ocean
. Once all
this
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 steps are completed, the
water
 cycle begins again.
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