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The three pie chart illustrate howmany hours students spend in the library in British university.

The three pie chart illustrate howmany hours students spend in the library in British university.
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The three pie
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 illustrate
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how many
hours
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students
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 spend in the library
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British
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 university. In general, there was a big difference in the
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 use of all categories of
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, and for one graduate
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 more
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 was used than for the other two groups in the library. Obviously, the largest proportion of the
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 is spent by postgraduate
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, just over
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half (51%) of whom have spent more than 15
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 in the library,
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 the use of 1-7
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 was very low, only 17%.
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Furthermore
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 and undergraduates
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 they most prefer to spend
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 from 1 to 7
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 that makes up a hefty 63 per cent in undergraduates and exactly
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half
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 all
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students
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 in these two groups used less
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 than postgraduates in terms of more than 15
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 with 15% and
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minority(9%).
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 who spent between 8 and 14
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less
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 undergraduates with 28% and
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 in all
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 with about one in three(35%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, students, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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