In spite of advance made in agriculture, manu people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Undoubtedly, many individuals would assure us that enhancement in
agriculture
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sector
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out to be the biggest phenomenon in
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of mankind.
Therefore
, despite
this
advancement, there are several countries still living under starvation. It seems to me that,
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or
climate
crisis, might be the problem of
this
limitation in
food
hunger.
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with,
agriculture
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sector with
labour saving
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technology
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biggest dealbreaker, whether it is
food
cropping or plantation of seed.
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, achievement of
this
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advance
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devices and vehicles,
yet
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many nations around the world are still facing
complication
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complications
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in hunger and
agriculture
.
Furthermore
, various scientific data have indicated that not only environmental problems but
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length of
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area is
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of
this
situation.
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,
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turn out
be
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nearly impossible to grow vegetables without any proper land facilities.
As a result
,
African
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and
other continent
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with larger spaces, but no
climate
solution or fertilised
field
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fields
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to invest in
agriculture
have to go through
starvation
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process.
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, different
continent
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continents
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with larger infrastructure in
agriculture
sectors could help,
thus
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these
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nations to solve
this
destruction in hunger.
While
, other measures
such
as
plantation
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the plantation
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of trees
helps
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, which could create
green
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consumer.
In addition
,
this
major
climate
crises
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crisis
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could stop with encouragement to plant trees, which will stop
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dessert
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to spread into
whole
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nation.
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, infertile soils need treatment, but it would be
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process to build
agriculture
in
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dessert
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desert
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.
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, bio plantation would be
wonderful
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choice for
food
production,
nor
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people would have to depend on other
food
resources. In conclusion,
solution
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of
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this
dilemma will only be solved by
climate
changes in soil, but
measurement
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on
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different
perspective
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could turn out to be
miracle
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a miracle
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. In my opinion, deprivation of
food
is our
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biggest problem,
although
fundraising and donation to poor countries will
also
help them.
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