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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport, and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today's tourism industry.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is tourism, which is the reason for the majority of issues related to environmental pollution
due to
 transportation and contaminated water. Now
people
 are beginning to realise that leaders of countries have to implement additional taxes on travel by plane or accommodation to reduce the level of tourism today. Personally, I tend to think that
this
 statement is absolutely wrong.
Firstly
, it is well known that the tourism industry is one of the main sources of economic activity in some regions. What I mean here is that establishing extra charges on flights will lead to the deterioration of the
counties's
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 wealth and population, respectively,
due to
 their economic state being connected with other spheres. One of the main reasons behind
that is
 that the number of
people
 visiting other locations by plane will decrease rapidly, and
companies's
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 income will drop too.
On the other hand
, it can
also
 be argued that the community will rebel, which,
consequently
, will disturb the peace.
That is
 to say, the power of governments will be undermined. In our modernity, not many
people
 can afford
such
 gratification, as a journey because it is already expensive.
Such
 measures will stop
people
 from travelling, relaxing with their whole family, visiting relatives who live a long distance away, and having higher education abroad in much more developed countries. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis, we can say that it will not determine the problems, at least because it will create others, so it is necessary to find other solutions that will be relevant for all scopes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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