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It is a fact of modern life that some bosses
also
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 take into consideration the opinions of their
workers
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 before taking action in highly decisive moments. Whilst I acknowledge that asking
employees
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 for their views on the company has possible disadvantages in society, I tend to believe that it is more likely to have beneficial impacts.
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 with, there are several possible negative sides of
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the involvement
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 of
labors
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labourers
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 in the process of coming up with ideas for the sake of the prosperity of
company
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the company
a company
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.
This
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 process will definitely divert
attention
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the attention
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 of
employees
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 from the essential tasks that they are actually responsible for and reduce the work efficiency considerably. To illustrate,
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recent empirical research revealed that multi-tasking carried out by
workers
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 is a predominant factor
to
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in
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 lower productivity and leading companies put an effort to
greater
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a greater
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 extent in order to keep the
employees
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 focused by limiting their duties.
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, it is obvious that
workers
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 could get offended in case
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their proposals are neglected by the executive board.
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, the failure to give sufficient attention
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 multi-tasking and the possibility of opinion rejection might result in
deterioration
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a deterioration
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 of work productivity.
On the other hand
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, I would argue that possible drawbacks are outweighed by benefits. It could be explained by the fact that
employees
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 could put forward a wide range of proposals by approaching the situation from diverse points of
views
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view
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. Anyone is able to devise a brilliant idea regardless of his position and his approach to the circumstance might be excessively helpful to
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the wellbeing
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wellbeing
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well-being
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 of
institution
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the institution
an institution
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 in comparison with others. I know from my personal experience
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how newcomers managed to come up with
the
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 solution to the financial difficulty of the company where I work
although
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 the board members even had been incapable of resolving it over several months.
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, asking for
employees
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’
opinion
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opinions
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 may them feel valuable and as a part of the whole family even if their suggestions are not taken seriously.
Thus
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,
workers
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 could play a pivotal role as a main source of ideas in the decision-making procedure and its psychological effect is obviously undeniable. In conclusion, I tend to believe that
possible
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the possible
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 advantages of taking into consideration a particular attitude of
employees
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 to the circumstance are more significant than its possible drawbacks.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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