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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a new way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
Nowadays, the biggest challenge for
human
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humans
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 is:'how to decrease
the
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climate
change
?'. Industrial production, deforestation, poisonous gases,... is the main reasons
lead
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that lead
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 to
climate
change
. Government,
school
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schools
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,
people
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and people
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 around us always tell us to
use
 less electricity, should not
use
 wood products,
not
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and not
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 to litter,... But someone thinks that people should try to live with
climate
change
instead
 of preventing it. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 idea. If we don't have any way to prevent
climate
change
, a lot of problems will happen. We can see
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
climate
change
. The number of tempests
have
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 doubled for the
last
 30 years.
Green house
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Greenhouse
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 effect makes the world hotter
everyday
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every day
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,
ices
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ice
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 in the ocean melt slowly, and it
cause
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causes
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increase
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an increase
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 in sea level. High
tempuratures
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temperatures
 can make many animals and plants have
ability
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the ability
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 to be extinct. Some countries do not have enough water for
the
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people
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people's
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 daily activities. Prolonged drought, flood, starvation, storm,.... if we just ignore
the
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climate
change
 and find some way to live peacefully and still destroy the environment with no regret, our next generation will face the worst consequences
can
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that can
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 happen. We can prevent
climate
change
 by changing some
habit
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habits
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, it is not too hard but it can help a lot. You should limit eating or using dairy products and eat more vegetables because planted-based food creates fewer greenhouse gas than meat or dairy products. Using buses, trains, bikes or public vehicles
instead
 of your personal car or
motocycle
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motorcycle
. Trying not to go on a plane unless
it
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isit
wasit
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 necessary, a flight can waste a large amount of fossil fuel. You should save
the
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energy
 in your house by turning off
electricial
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electric
 appliances when
we
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you
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 do not
use
it
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them
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. Or you can think about using solar
energy
, solar
energy
 is a renewable
energy
 source, you just have to put the solar panels on your rooftop and
use
energy
 from the sun. There are many ways to prevent
climate
change
 easily, if you
wan t
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want
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 to do it, you will do it. We should find ways to
slowdown
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slow down
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the
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climate
change
instead
 of
find
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finding
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 reasons to continue destroying the natural environment. "
instead
 of preventing
climate
change
, we need to find a new way to live with it" is a lazy, irresponsible idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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