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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, there are some arguments with regard to
teenagers
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' choice of
subjects
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 in schools.
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 some state that
teenagers
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 have to force into certain
subjects
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 that can be good at it, I totally believe that they should focus on all lessons.
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 of the main reasons why
people
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 cite that teens should give their whole attention to
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 essential subject is that they can get strong theoretical knowledge since childhood. Other 'unnecessary'
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as well as
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 information related to them can not distract
teenagers
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. Young
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 select
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 path and they have a chance to practice it over and over the years. Throughout
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pathway
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 they might meet some
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 that help them to build professional careers and networks. Take Shakira as an example, she is the most accomplished woman singer and she admits that
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career
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 path was made by her parents. By devoting herself to music from childhood, she can onward
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 more step from her peers.
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, I believe that all
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 are essential and should be taught to teens.
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 there are some benefits to focusing on certain
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, I believe that we have to consider them from the opposite angle. I think parents need not force teens to select their major, it is not their case. It would give a chance to acknowledge all
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 beforehand, and young
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 can decide which subject is the most suitable for them and they can establish their
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. In Azerbaijan's education system,
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 have to get all
subjects
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 mandatory as long as they finish school.
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, they can associate with their
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 in terms of their favourite
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. In summary,
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 some
people
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 say that
teenagers
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 should be forced to concentrate on
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 essential subject, I have to admit that younger
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 benefit much more if they acknowledge all
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 in order to draw their own
career
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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