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some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money . Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations .

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it is better or even good to
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 others believe that
people
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 should overcome their
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 in order to improve their
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 matter. It has been argued by many
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 that, accepting the bad situation is a good thing for humans .
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 if someone has a job that he or she does not like it's good to accept it in order to create some kind of satisfaction and avoid the mental
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 of rejecting
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reality
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 as stress , depression and other
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. But the question is , what will actually
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 if
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 are stuck in
situations
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 they don't like
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 making any effort to improve it ? To answer
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 question mentioned above , many
people
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 including myself believe that ,
people
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 should try to enhance and improve their
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problems
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 and finding solutions to them .
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 If a person lost his job and had financial difficulties it is best to find another job or even try to
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 or launch a business , by
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 way
people
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wil
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will
 have the ability to deal with bad
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 in a positive way and
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 them to enjoy life better.
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, failure and
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normal aspects of life and as
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 we should learn how to overcome
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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