some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money . Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations .

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it is better or even good to
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people
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problems
in order to improve their
situations
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I will discuss both sides
as well as
sharing my personal opinion on
this
matter. It has been argued by many
people
that, accepting the bad situation is a good thing for humans .
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if someone has a job that he or she does not like it's good to accept it in order to create some kind of satisfaction and avoid the mental
problems
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reality
such
as stress , depression and other
problems
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if
people
are stuck in
situations
they don't like
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making any effort to improve it ? To answer
this
question mentioned above , many
people
including myself believe that ,
people
should try to enhance and improve their
situations
by overcoming
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problems
and finding solutions to them .
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If a person lost his job and had financial difficulties it is best to find another job or even try to
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or launch a business , by
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people
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will
have the ability to deal with bad
situations
in a positive way and
this
will
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them to enjoy life better.
To conclude
, failure and
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normal aspects of life and as
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we should learn how to overcome
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