The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of retail sales made online of four diverse products in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Generally, what stands out from the pie diagram is that in 2003 the travel sector was at the peak of its development, and
on the contrary
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, books were at the very bottom, but in 2013 online sales of these goods fell and increased
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. If we look at 2003, travel was considerably more popular than books, with figures of 37% and 19% respectively. Clothes and film or music were equally popular at 22 in proportion. Regarding the changes in 2013, books went up slightly from 19% to 22%.
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, the number of travel and clothes consumers dropped significantly from 37% to 29% and from 22% to 16% correspondingly in 2013.
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, in 2003, 22% of sales were in film and music,
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, by 2013 the number decreased noticeably to 29%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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