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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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Both maps demonstrate how did transform the entrance to a
city
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 hospital from 2007 to 2010. Over the period, the area of the
city
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 hospital changed dramatically by adding public places around the hospital. Separate
car
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 parks and bus stops are the foremost developments which have been done in
this
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 area during
this
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 period. The most noticeable addition is a public bus terminal.
Furthermore
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, it is constructed to the southwest of the
city
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 health care centre with
two
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 main entrances and connected to the
two
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 roundabouts.
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, these roundabouts were built on the
two
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 extremes of the hospital road. Looking at these plans,
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 common and hospital worker's
car
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 parks were situated in one place, which was between the hospital entrance and
city
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 road in 2007 it has totally rebuilt in
two
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 locations by 2010. On the one hand, a public
car
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 park was constructed on the east side of the health care centre.
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, the staff
car
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 park modernized in the place, which has situated in an old one.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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