Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situations , such as an unsatifactory job or shortage of money . Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations .

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it is better to adapt
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worse circumstances
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financial
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and
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unsatisfactory
occupations .
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my personal opinion on
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accepting a bad situation is a good thing to avoid
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that
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with the issues could have a positive
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in
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avoiding
a wide range of problems
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stress
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depression
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in dealing with it .
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it is best to make
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to
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the situation and not to give up and accept the circumstances . People must find
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to fight and combat the bad conditions .
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a business .
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In addition
, individuals can achieve higher
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success
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to overcome a situation they are not satisfied with .
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communities
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are obliged to overcome complications in order to get positive results , and as the proverb goes , you only live once
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will exploit all my spirit to
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