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Nowadays newspapers publish information about private lives of individuals. Some people think the government should maintain certain control over the information that gets published, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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to an extent B1 : people know more about their fav. celebrity, read articles, fav. foods , hobbies etc. how they eductaed themselves , motivation, what drives them through. B2 : they have personal
life
, need some space, own secrets , family
life
, people judge, make assumptions. There is no denying the fact that, news houses these days are known for highlighting personal lives and information of famous faces. It is considered fine by many, but, other school of thought finds it disguisting and wants the government to intervene impose some regulation and maintain
this
 to a certain level.
However
, I agree with both the views to an extent, and
further
 paragraphs will shed light on the side
along with
 my opinion.
To begin
 with the positive side of printing news about individual's
life
,
firstly
,
this
 allows general public to know much better about their icon of real
life
. Reading articles, knowing their hobbies, favourite food, pass time habbits can give them glimpse of what their role-models do, apart from being in front of the public.
Secondly
,
this
 can
also
 prove very vital for many individuals,
for example
, getting to know more about the real
life
 heros, could potentially motivate them to do best in their fields
as well as
, people will
also
 realise how much one has to struggle to achive in
life
 and how to be humble and dow-to-earth at the same time.
On the other hand
, publishing more about
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